Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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countries should welcome more displaced people and offer them
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essential needs,
such
as food and
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accommodations
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.
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essay strongly
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to
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this
statement because
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is a social issue and can help boost economic growth. It is important to give
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assistance
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refugees as we all know it's not easy to leave your own country torn from war or famine. For wealthy
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they
alotted
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allotted
a budget for
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a humanitarian
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cause
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so
this
does not put
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on their government.
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,
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received
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number of fugitives from Ukraine wherein people started to feel
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and build their own life. Another reason why they should open their borders is that
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this
large number of escaped can do
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jobs
such
as factory or agriculture with cheap
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. In
this
way
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it will help cover the gaps
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unemployment and generate more income.
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, Canada
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is known to have a large mass of area but
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of
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human resources. In conclusion, there are
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of refugees all over the world and wealthy states should not be reluctant to accept them because
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is just a small portion of the public coffers and humanity
shopuld
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should
exists everywhere.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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