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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
In Modern
society
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 there is
need
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 to discuss who is going to protect
the
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nature
. Rulers and Multi-national organizations
have
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a paly
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paly
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play
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 crucial
role
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 to protect the environment. I totally disagree
on
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this
. the subsequent paragraphs will explain why
i
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 reject the mentioned notion.
Firstly
, Everyone has to protect
nature
habitants
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habitats
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. Mainly
masses
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the masses
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has
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 to
things
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do things
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 like growing the plants in
thier
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their
the
sorroundings
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surroundings
. the questions are how the
individuals
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individual's
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 role and how they protect
the
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nature
. each year masses have to plant the trees on roadside and
empty
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 places.
In addition
 to
this
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,limit
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limit
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 the use of plastic and chemicals has
everyones
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 responsibility.
Furthermore
, Teachers and Parents have to encourage the educate
the
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yong
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young
 persons the importance of
the
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nature
 and its benefits. run
the
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nature
 safety campaigns across
the
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towns and cities.Implement the major safety guidelines in
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public areas. In conclusion,
Limit
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 the chemicals and plastic use in Major cities can protect
the
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society.
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