In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?
Adverts
of
beer, wine and Change preposition
for
spirit
are being banned in many nations. Fix the agreement mistake
spirits
This
essay agrees with Linking Words
this
statement because we all know Linking Words
alcohol
is bad for our health Use synonyms
moreover
the social vices it causes.
Advertising Linking Words
alcoholic
brands should be stopped because Change preposition
of alcoholic
its
harmful to a Correct your spelling
it's
persons
health. Too much consumption of alcoholic beverages will lead to diseases Change noun form
person's
such
as liver cancer and brain toxicity. Linking Words
Hence
, Linking Words
this
substance Linking Words
are
hard to quit once addicted to it. Change the verb form
is
Moreover
, these big companies Linking Words
uses
famous celebrities to endorse the products and sway potential consumers without warning of the dangers. Change the verb form
use
For example
, Tanduay a local Linking Words
brandy
in Correct your spelling
brand
Philippines
wherein a lot of people patronizes Correct article usage
the Philippines
this
brand with high demand and positive reviews. Linking Words
On the other hand
, many people get sick and it Linking Words
resulted
strain on Add the preposition
inresulted
fromresulted
health
system of the state.
Another reason why the promotion of Add an article
the health
alcohol
should be prohibited is the alarming number of crimes being reported Use synonyms
everyday
. Replace the word
every day
Nonetheless
, humans tend to have delusions once they get drank and rampant killing, rape, and suicide Linking Words
committed
due to Add a missing verb
are committed
its
intoxication. Correct pronoun usage
their
In addition
, Linking Words
alcohol
is implicated in social and Use synonyms
psychologic
problems, including arrest, violence and depression. Replace the word
psychological
For instance
, Linking Words
Russian
has a big problem with alcoholism and decided to stop companies Correct your spelling
Russia
in
advertising the products in TV and print ads, its effect was a massive change in Change preposition
from
peoples
behaviour.
In conclusion, Change noun form
people's
alcohol
is a hazardous product and advertisers should not be allowed to convince people to try and drink it. I, Use synonyms
therefore
, Linking Words
belive
that more countries should Correct your spelling
believe
banned
advertising liquors.Change the verb form
ban
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