In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?

Adverts

of

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beer, wine and

spirit

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spirits

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are being banned in many nations.

This

essay agrees with

this

statement because we all know

alcohol

is bad for our health

moreover

the social vices it causes. Advertising

alcoholic

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of alcoholic

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brands should be stopped because

its

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harmful to a

persons

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health. Too much consumption of alcoholic beverages will lead to diseases

such

as liver cancer and brain toxicity.

Hence

,

this

substance

are

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hard to quit once addicted to it.

Moreover

, these big companies

uses

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famous celebrities to endorse the products and sway potential consumers without warning of the dangers.

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, Tanduay a local

brandy

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brand

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in

Philippines

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the Philippines

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wherein a lot of people patronizes

this

brand with high demand and positive reviews.

On the other hand

, many people get sick and it

resulted

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strain on

health

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system of the state. Another reason why the promotion of

alcohol

should be prohibited is the alarming number of crimes being reported

everyday

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.

Nonetheless

, humans tend to have delusions once they get drank and rampant killing, rape, and suicide

committed

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due to

its

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intoxication.

In addition

,

alcohol

is implicated in social and

psychologic

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problems, including arrest, violence and depression.

For instance

,

Russian

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Russia

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has a big problem with alcoholism and decided to stop companies

in

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from

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advertising the products in TV and print ads, its effect was a massive change in

peoples

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behaviour. In conclusion,

alcohol

is a hazardous product and advertisers should not be allowed to convince people to try and drink it. I,

therefore

,

belive

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believe

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that more countries should

banned

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ban

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advertising liquors.