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Your department had been given additional work at a company you work for which is creating problems. Write a letter to your manager. In it - Explain what the additional work is. - What problems are you facing due to extra work - Offer a solution to solve You should You do NOT need to write your own address.

Dear Sir, I am writing because we have a
problem
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 in the transport department and
new
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a new
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 policy before we take the truck out from
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yard
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the yard
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everyday
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every day
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. The new rule for us to fill form, check
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the tire
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tire
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tires
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 and wheels and
take
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get
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okay
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an okay
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 sign from
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yard
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the yard
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manager
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and
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, and
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this
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 is
new
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a new
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problem
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 because the
manager
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not
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is not
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 coming to
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yard
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the yard
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in
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on
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time
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.
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, we are
truckdrivers
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truck drivers
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 and asking us to do the
mekanics
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mechanics
 job is not correct. I must first of all say that
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 is making
big
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a big
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problem
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 because we come to duty on
time
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, fill form and
also
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 now
doing
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do
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 all vehicle checks for safety. But the
manager
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taking
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is taking
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 more
time
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 to check the truck
one
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 by
one
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 before we can move out of
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yard
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the yard
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. So we are not
now
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apply
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starting driving at 6.00am
but
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, but
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 we start at 9.45am. We
starting
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started
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 late from
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yard
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the yard
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and
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, and
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 so we are coming back late
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.
This
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 is too much
wasting
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apply
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time
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.
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wasted.
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 So, I am making
one
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 suggestion for
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yard
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the yard
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manager
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 to have
one
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 or two
assistant
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assistants
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 who check the truck document so we can leave
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yard
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the yard
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 fast on
time
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.
This
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solving
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solves
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problem
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the problem
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 for all. Yours sincerely, Sam

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structure
Put each idea in its own paragraph. Start with what the extra work is, then the problems, then the fix.
tone
The greeting and closing are good. Keep polite form.
paragraphing
Use one idea per paragraph. Break the long paragraph into 3 small ones.
content
Explain the extra work and its impact clearly. Give a clear ask.
language
Keep tone formal. Check spelling and use shorter sentences.
greeting
Good greeting and closing.
content
Clear aim to help fix the yard policy.
solution
You give a quick fix to ease the delay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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