Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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These days , in
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competitive world
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are busier than past . They have to spend more
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working and studying
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of sleeping .
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,
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are becoming more successful in technology they would not have a healthy
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body
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.
people
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are working more than usual
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to make money for a comfortable
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but it might cause sleeping problems
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therefore
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do not have enough rest and after a while, they would not have enough energy to work .
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, enough sleep may help to have a better quality of
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because they would wake up happier when they had enough sleep
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it helps them to have a better feel during the day .
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, it has an extraordinary effect on their
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span . In the
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survey of scientists
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who did not have sufficient sleep had a shorter
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span ,they said lack of sleep would affect brain activity and after a while, their brain will not command other parts of
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, the whole
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performance might be interrupted.
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of all , I believe it is really important
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have a great timetable to manage their
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it would help them to decrease their waste
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governments can do a good role in their
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's
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if they focus on
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performance
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of
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. In another word, they should encourage
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to make new ways to do work which are easier and faster
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of working long hours without any creative ideas.
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it would not happen unless they have enough sleep and an open mind . In conclusion ,
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with a healthy
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life style
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have better performance in their
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and
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have a longer
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span .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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