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People should work a fixed number of hours per week and employers should not ask anybody to work extra hours. discuss both of views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #work #hours #week #employers #anybody
From regular office
workers
 to street cleaners, it is a common norm for people to
work
 under fixed
hours
.While there
are
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 suggestion that
empolyers
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employers
 should not ask for
empolyees
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employees
 to
work
 over
time
 due to various of reasons.The advantages and disadvantages of working outside fixed
hours
 would be
disscussed
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discussed
. When it comes
of
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to
work
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 under a fixed
time
scedule
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schedule
,
workers
 could have full control
on
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of
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 their free
time
,which leads to a balanced
life
 between
work
 and personal
life
, improving a person's quality of
life
.Without the need for working extra
hours
,
workers
 could predict leaving
time
 precisely and plan for
after
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work
 activities for their personal
life
.These activities could be skills which improve one's hobbies or even new skills that could benefit the person's career plan in the future.
Furthermore
,
such
 spare
time
 could include gatherings with close relatives and friends. If well spent, these events can reduce stress from
working
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envrionment
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environment
 and leave
a
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 overall good impression
for
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 the company for providing
work-
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work-life
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life
 balance to
workers
 which creates a win-win situation.
However
, for companies with packed
scedules
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schedules
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, crunch culture is inevitable in specific industries, especially the entertainment industry.Without
over
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overtime
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time
work
, most products would not deliver in tight releases and the industry would collapse as long
release
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releases
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 between each product could not satisfy the large demands from potential investors and regular buyers.
For instance
, if game studios had worked in fixed
work
hours
, most
high production
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 games would have taken more than a decade to be published due to the sheer amount of content have to deliver with
devlopers
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developers
have
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 to
work
in
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 different projects simiutainiously.
In other words
, it would be a nightmare for companies to maintain consistent product release and source of stable income if employers do not ask for
over
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time
. To conclude, the overall quality of
life
 for employees would be improved if employers would not ask to
work
 more than a specific
work
 period,
on the other hand
, some companies had to suffer
form
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 irregular income due to a longer
time
spand
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spend
span
spent
 on releasing each product.It is best for
empolyers
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employers
employees
 to determine the benefits and drawbacks
on
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 working extra
hours
base
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different
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 scenarios.
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