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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To wat extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since ancient times, people would spend thousands of hours
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looking at texts
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 by great authors.
However
,
children
 have
further
 choices on what to spend time with thanks to modern technology. Some might believe that reading fictional
books
 are better for
children
 than watching TV or playing computer games and I agree with
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.
Children
 who consume fiction could be beneficial in the long term as reading
books
 could improve their attention span without relying on visualised excitement. Since reading stories requires the reader to have
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sufficient
 amount of attention to scan through pages without zoning out,
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children
 would have difficulty
to follow
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 through
interactions
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 between characters and
its
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world building
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. Not to mention that the education
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 students to consume hundreds of
non fiction
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books
 for
further
 study.
Therefore
, it is better for
young
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 child to train their focus on
text based
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 mediums rather than spending time on
visual-base
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visual-based
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 mediums
such
 as playing video games and watching television. Unlike TV shows,
books
 allow readers to imagine unique settings and lore, boosting young
childrens
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children
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 both creative and visual development. Different people
interpet
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interpret
 various results even if they look at the same
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sentence
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while playing games provide a grand scale of world building for young kids to enjoy,
hunderds
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hundreds
 of interpretations could be
imgained
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imagined
gained
 in alternative settings within story
books
 which have more creative freedom than exploring premade scenes make by mainstream companies. To sum up, a good story
lead
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children
 to explore their inner creativity
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sea
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 of text and practice long-term focus to prepare for reading heavy-text materials in the future.
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