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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

#people #places #visit #food #attitudes
People
are divide
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 on their own
opinion
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opinions
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 regarding their mood of changing. Many
grops
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groups
 of
people
 like to not do the same thing twice
while
 others prefer
keeping
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 doing the same thing without any
differnces
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differences
difference
. In
this
 essay, I am going to present the positive side of each one.
To begin
 with,
people
 who like to do new things might be having a good
expernce
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experience
 in their life. To put it
simple
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, when someone does the same plan with another way to do
such
 is change their own places,
trying
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a new food
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new food
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 and hang out
to
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in
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 different places,
the
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they
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 will have the ability to meet new
people
 and
this
 is going to increase their confidence level.
As a result
, psychological and mental strength will be better with those
people
 who like change.
However
, there are some kinds of
people
 who prefer doing the same plan more than once
as well as
 doing
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same activity on
daily
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a daily
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 basis without getting bored. The primary reason for
this
 trend is that they are scared of failure.
Although
, they are delighted with their
life style
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lifestyle
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.
For instance
, my brother likes to eat
from
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at
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 the same restaurant almost
everyday
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every day
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. He says that he tries to save money which eating from the same place
let
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him know the budget he needs, he said that when I go to new places to eat, I find the prices formally different and more
expencive
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expensive
.
As a result
, if there is no
feling
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feeling
filing
 bored of
doin
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doing
doin'
 the same,
people
 will be able to manage their budget
through
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in
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 a nice way. In
conclosion
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conclusion
,
while
 it is
impossiple
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impossible
 for a few to beyond their safe life, in my opinion, searching for ang new activities can be helpful to overcome the boredom of the routine and I
completly
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completely
 agree that it gives happiness and creates
ectiement
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excitement
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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