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The plans below the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the inofrmation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
two
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 maps show the layout of a university’s
sports
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 centre now, and how it will look after
redesign
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the redesign
a redesign
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. Overall, it is obvious to find the difference between these
two
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 maps no matter the quantity of the buildings and the shop. The map at present has a 25 meters
pool
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 in the centre, and
two
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 outdoor courts located on the West of the
pool
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 and on the East of the
pool
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. There is a reception which is semicircle in shape on the South of the
pool
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.
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, the Gym is located
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the North of the
pool
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. More specifically, the university
sports
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 centre's future plan is to redevelop new layouts. The leisure
pool
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 will be built to the West of the original
pool
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. It replaced the outdoor courts. In these
two
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 pools, there is a changing room between them.
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, the East of the outdoor courts will be replaced by the
sports
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 hall. There are
two
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 dance studios to the East of the
sports
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 hall.
Two
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 of the changing rooms will be built in the corner of the map. At the entrance, there is a
sports
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 shop on the left side and a cafe on the right side.
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