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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is common for elders to reside with other old
people
 in a nursing home while they are getting older in Britain. Some
people
 advocate that it is the
government
's responsibility to pay for
fee
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the fee
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 of the
care
, while other
people
 are in
favor
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 of affording the payment themselves. From my point of view,
costs
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the costs
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 of elderly
care
 should be paid by the family as well as the
government
with
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for
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following
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the following
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 reasons. Family is the most intimate group in a person's life, which meant to back up each other in any
circumstances
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, not to mention
the
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apply
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basic support
such
 as caring.
That is
, parents took
care
 of their children when they were little, and it is their
duties
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 to look after their parents while they are getting old. Taxes that citizens paid yearly to the
government
 should be used while nursing
care
are
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 needed in their
late
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 life.
People
 in the country devoted
themselves
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their
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entire
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their entire
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 life
into
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to
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 various kinds of industries not just for living, but
also
 as a part of the
nation
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nation's
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 development.
For example
, a soldier who served his country
many
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for many
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 years should be managed after his retirement. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, as the reasons mentioned above, the family and the
government
 should both take responsibility
of
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for
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 the burden of
the
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apply
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elderly
care
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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