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AN E-MAIL HAS HAD A HUGE IMPACT ON PROFESSIONAL AND SOCIAL COMMUNICATION, BUT THIS IMPACT HAS BEEN NGEGATIVE AND POSITIVE. DO THE DISADVANTAGES OF USING E-MAIL OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

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The era of the 21st century has witnessed technology and development.
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 to the past, in the present time
people
 easily communicate with anyone from anywhere via use of the
email
. Nowadays, professionally and socially, different
people
 use
email
 to complete their work according to their working schedule.
However
, emails have a lot of merits as compared to demerits. In
this
 essay, I will outweigh the disadvantages and give
a brief information
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 about
advantages
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the advantages
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.
To begin
 with, before the development of technology, there was a time when
people
 could not do their work as fast as compared to the present time.
Also
, in terms of communication, professionals
such
 as businessmen and employees sent a letter for confirmation to complete or run the
further
 process according to their rules and regulations.
However
, in
this
 modern era, individuals as well as all
people
 who run the big industrial area and youngsters communicate with any type of
organisations
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organisation
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 for different purposes
such
 as inquiry, filling the academic forms and so on.
On the other hand
,
email
 has drawbacks
also
.
Firstly
, the public has a strong bandwidth connection to send and receive
mails
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mail
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.
Secondly
, not everyone can easily use
email
, because the function and system are tough to understand for beginners.
Moreover
, mail has a feature to check the grammar correctly, which is good for beginners as well as for advanced
people
 to help them to solve linguistic issues. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that using mail is beneficial to those who really want to finish the work with a deadline and
also
 it is
a
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 best platform for everyone to send the meeting schedules, receive
catalogue
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, brochure and so on.
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