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In many developingcountries there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

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Water
 and
air
pollution
 are alarming phenomena among industrialization in many developing
countries
. Factories and constructions are considered the main factors causing
this
 problem all over the
world
 and now we need to find a way to resolve and prevent it, the essay below will demonstrate my research about
this
. As we can see, many governments in the
world
 are focused into develop their town to attract more foreign investors, rise the economy and catch up to the
world
. The race between these developing
countries
 has many benefits as well as negative effects on the environment. The benefit is unemployment would decrease because there are many factories, constructions, companies and businesses that need employees to be on the market.
Moreover
, these developing regions' economic systems would be advanced, and more and more people from other
countries
 would apply for an occupation in their country and that would be an advantage, as it contributes to their GDP and cash flow.
For instance
, Japan has the
world
's most modern manufacturing, great in coinsurance and salary for employees and it attracts many workers from other
countries
, especially
third
world
countries
 like Vietnam, Laos or other South East Asia
countries
, the result is it brought a huge profit for Japan economy because workers from these
countries
 have the cheapest payment in average compared to workers from their
countries
.
On the other hand
, developing
countries
 affected the environment very badly in recent years.
Air
pollution
 and
water
pollution
 are in the warning stage, it losing balance in the ecosystem, killing and bringing animals to the edge of extinction.
For instance
, animals like fish, and wild animals are dying more and more due to a lack of fresh
water
 and fresh
air
. To prevent
water
 and
air
pollution
, governments have to restrict the number of
water
 from factories, citizens
also
 have a solution to stop releasing too much dust into the
air
 by construction. In consequence, even though preventing
pollution
 are obstacle but we all have to give a hand to protect the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental regulations
  • emissions
  • sustainable practices
  • public transportation
  • vehicular pollution
  • public awareness campaigns
  • renewable energy
  • green spaces
  • environmental impact assessments
  • pollution control technologies
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