Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime?

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In the current fast-paced world, young people
mainly
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involved in
crime
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crimes
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such
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as violence,
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gangsterism
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, bullying and homicide. The essay will discuss the factors for
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phenomenon and some
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solutions
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for
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family members and
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social platforms.
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with, the major factor here is all young people are now allowed to access the
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at
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age.
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, A 2018 study by Cambridge
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found that 93% of youth
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14-22 use social media,
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daily.
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, wasting time on platforms like crime movie sites and violent video games can
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affect
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criminal
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. Another cause is
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number of children who do not receive enough attention from family, which can
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lead to depression, anxiety and
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. Turning into
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solution, parents should monitor to reduce
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effect
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effects
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of media violence on children by setting limits of time to kids watch some beneficial programmes. If we
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implemented
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remedy, it would be greatly prevention from
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aforementioned social media.
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, family members
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should
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more attention to loving and listening
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if
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caring were
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possible, it would prevent
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mental health
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problems
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and childhood trauma.
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, A research paper by NIH published that childhood experiences
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as physical and emotional abuse are associated with serious offending in adulthood.
To sum up
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, usage of websites and lack of attention from parents appear to be the main causes. The minister of education, parents and teachers can
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team up and manage misleading social content for children.
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