Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as deser or the antarctic. What are the benefit and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

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Nowadays more and more tourists are visiting both unique and original
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as the desert or the antarctic. On the
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hand, in my personal opinion, I think that these people, who decide to travel right there, are very fascinated by the natural environment; most of these people are obviously researchers studying natural contexts or interested in searching the main aspects of those particular areas of the world. Apart from their temperature, these
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offer a large variety of animals that nobody could see in other ways during their life. Of course, we are talking about white bears, pitons, scorpions and many others.
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, an amazing experience is offered by
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visiting journey.
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there are a lot of drawbacks which could be exposed in
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, the climate which characterizes these
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is in the desert, sometimes the temperature is around fifty degrees; in the antarctic, the opposite.
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, if
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thinks about the uncertain lifestyle which focused on the absence of water on the
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hand and on the lack of a certain warmth on the other,
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understands how could be difficult to survive in that situation.
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there are no hopes for agriculture or industrial companies to prosper. Overall,
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is an outstanding experience that does not repeat another time, for the reasons that I explained in detail previously,
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, personally, that are not the specific kind of
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that everyone could pass their entire life in.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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