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Water resources around the world are falling deficient. Analyze the possible reasons and provide your suggestions.

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Water
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resources
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 all over the world are in decline. The causes of
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 situation may vary from growing population to high demand for
industry
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 but mostly because of aqueous pollution.
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this
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 problem requires many steps and
resources
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, and I believe the most important part is changing the ways people think of protecting
water
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 sources. The shortage of
water
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 is nothing new, which is caused by many reasons. A well-known reason is the blooming of
population
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, which leads to a high amount requirement
of
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water
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 all over the world.
Water
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 sources, like other types of natural
resources
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, are limited.
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, it is inevitable that they will
exhausted
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 someday.
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, the growing industry
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 requires a lot of
water
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.
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,
water
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 used for
industry
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 is contaminated by chemicals and other materials, including micro-plastic particles, so
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it can hardly be reused and recycled after treatment. With the pollution
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 to happen, we may run out of
water
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 in the near future. To solve
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 problem, one may expect the government to establish
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laws for protecting
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 sources. The results have been seen in some developed countries in the world. Others may hope for
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changes from the business communities. The companies should and must have plans for sewage treatment as they have
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responsibilities
with
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the
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society.
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, a solution
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 best in my opinion is changing people's
mind
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minds
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 about the situation. We all use
water
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,
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 we all need to take
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 in protecting the aqueous
resources
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, for our lives and our
youngsters
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youngster's
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 lives. In conclusion, I believe that
water
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 deficiency is mostly due to pollution and we all need to contribute to saving
water
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 for our daily lives and our future.
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