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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines
Nowadays, it is believed that
conventional
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 method of reading will be substituted by
the
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modern technology. The
posibility
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possibility
 of reading anywhere, obtaining easily the
information
 and preserving the environment are three motives why
this
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement. The
first
 cause why
traditional
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 mode of reading might be substituted by
the
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applications,which can read the book directly from your device. Reading from your device is likely to be
more
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 suitable way, as it encourages outdoor activities while someone can stay in
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nature.
Moreover
, the
information
 is just under your fingerprints.
Therefore
, just by typing the
key word
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 or the name of the article, someone may find all the
information
 related to that subject.
Thus
, it is unnecessary to commute to the library in obtaining the
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information
.
For example
, the application
Etricks
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Patricks
, can read at your
desire
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 pace the book and
also
 encourages and helps not only children but
also
 adults in acquiring more knowledge.
In addition
,
although
 the paper is recycled,
by
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reading a book or an article from the application, may determine the reduction of deforestation as more and more people are shifting towards electronic devices.
This
 may lead to
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 and
understand
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 the importance of protecting the environment. The statistics show that since these options appeared in your life, the number of
paper based
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 books and newspapers have declined significantly. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
although
 time is needed to absolutely replace the traditional method of gaining
information
, people's awareness about the quality
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spend
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 in nature, the lack of time and the importance of preserving the environment has increased dramatically in the
last
 decade.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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