Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime?

Nowadays, many young
people
are committing a
crime
in most countries in the world. There are
some
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certain issues that young
people
commit an
offense
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, but
also
some effective solutions
reducing
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crime
. Perhaps the most common factor that
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or
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young
people
to break the law
can be
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unemployment.
For example
, in my country, Mongolia, young adults
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the workforce without having completed their
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degree
due to
early marriage.
This
makes finding a job difficult.
This
may lead them to be offenders. The recency effect can be related to the number of internet users is increasing. A number of teenagers and young
people
,
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to earn money in
easy
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way, are getting involved in cybercrime. The elderly or the very young –
two
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groups likely to become victims of computer
crime
. Turning to effective solutions, the government can implement short-term and
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apprenticeship programs for young families. If
people
made enough money to live, they would not get involved in
crime
.
Secondly
, parents need to prevent their minors from using the Internet too much and raise the awareness of elderly
people
about
the
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cyber security. It would help to lower
crime
rates if
the
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certain groups of
people
most likely to be affected by
crime
could protect themselves from
the
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cybercrime. In conclusion, unemployment and uncontrolled use of the Internet are contributing to the high incidence of
crime
among young
people
. The government and parents should be responsible for
this
. And possibly too,
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moral education can help
people
to be law-abiding citizens.
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