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How to Protect Environment and its habitats. who is responsible for destrying the nature

#environment #habitats #nature
The
environment
 is the fundamental source of all possible existence on planet Earth.
However
, over the recent years, the
environment
 has been exploited excessively because of
which
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this
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 the environmental conditions are becoming worse day by day. Pollution of air, water and land, mining, industrialisation, modern urbanisation, deforestation,
release
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and release
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 of chemical effluents and landfills are some of the major factors that cause the gradual deterioration of the
environment
. It is necessary to conserve the
environment
 in order to protect wildlife and
to
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apply
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preserve
the
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different species. With the disastrous pace of climate change, a result of pollution and exploitation of the
environment
, finding out ways to protect the
environment
 from any
further
 damage should be the
first
 priority. Bringing back the
environment
 to its original state is critically important and is the only solution. Working towards a common goal will be the easiest and fastest way to keep the
environment
 from any more harm. According to Ban Ki-moon, “Saving our planet, lifting people out of poverty, advancing economic growth… these are one and the same fight. We must connect the dots between climate change, water scarcity, energy shortages, global health, food security and women’s empowerment. Solutions to one problem must be solutions for all”.
This
 is what we have to act on and look forward to – finding the dots, connecting them and providing solutions. The leaders of the world are working to reduce the rapid degradation of the
environment
, and there are organizations like the United Nations
who
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that
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 come up with initiatives to create awareness and get people to take
actions
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action
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 to curb the problems of the
environment
. Some of these initiatives include the 2019 Sustainable Development Summit,
2019
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the 2019
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 Climate Action Summit,
2030
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the 2030
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 Agenda for Sustainable Development, Paris Agreement and many other programs that include river conservation, afforestation, coastal management, wetland conservation and so on. While all these measures are in action, individuals are
also
 obliged to take steps to preserve the
environment
 that everyone is a part of. With everyone’s efforts, we can be sure that all of it will definitely make a difference and help the
environment
 in becoming healthy and sustainable.
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