Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue is that better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation
such
as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money whereas some of them claim that it is better to try and improve
such
situations.
Eventhough
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Even though
by accepting a
such
bad situation doesn’t
leads
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to risk .
Moreover
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my belief is that
one
should fight against
one
’s personal circumstances to succeed in life .
This
being my point of view , I will give reasons below that urged me to think
this
way.
One
of my friends faced financial difficulties during her school days. She
want
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to become a doctor.In order to get a seat she has to clear the
national level
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exam to get a seat.
For
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that
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she doesn’t have enough money to join the coaching class. But she didn’t lose
her
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hope. She rather learned herself by watching youtube videos. At
last
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she was able to get a medical seat. From
her
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I learned how to overcome
such
difficulties.
Eventhough
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Even though
Bill Gates came from
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a middle
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middle class
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family. He faced
lot
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of difficulties and he overcame
that
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those
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challenges to become a successful entrepreneur.
Also
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I remembered
one
of his quotes “To win big you sometimes have to take big risks”. These events that I have witnessed helped me to form the belief that
one
should never accept the limitations that fate imposes on us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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