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Computer games is very popular in all ages and nations. Parent think it has little educational Value and more harmful effects. What is your opinion about this? Give example based on your own experience.

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I totally agree that
computer
games
 are very popular among people of all ages and nations and I do agree on
its
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their
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 harmful effect, but
educationl
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educational
education
 value whether is it little or not is questionable.
I've
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I
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 started playing
video
games
 when I was 6 or 7 years old, at
this
 age,
video
games
was
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were
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 very
prymative
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primitive
 and less appealing, so playing
video
games
 was less frequent.
me
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I
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 and my
pears
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peers
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prefered
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preferred
 other
games
 and toys, moving around by
the
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apply
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bike, playing hide and seek and other
childesh
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childish
games
. growing up to
the
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apply
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teenagehood,
video
games
 evolved to
other level
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another level
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 to be more attractive and addictive, so now I'm playing for longer times with friends and it's purely for entertainment, but what protected me from addiction is not having a gaming devise in home, to play
coputer
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computer
games
 I need to play outside and buy time to play. after having a
computer
in
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at
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 home I became a
computer
games
 addict, playing for hours and hours, ignoring food,
homework
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and homework
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 and staying up all night playing, at
this
 time my parents intervened to put an end to
this
 and confiscated my
computer
. Today I'm 37 years old man
whom
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who
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 can easily fall
in
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into
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 addiction
for
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to
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computer
games
, I've survived all other types of addiction except for
computer
games
, I keep myself busy with other useful things and avoid
computer
games
 trying not to follow
this
 pass again. In the
begining
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beginning
,
computer
games
was
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were
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 only for entertainment but in the past 15
years
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,years
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 it evolved to be
also
 for educational purposes which
is
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are
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good
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a good
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 thing to benefit from children's attraction to
video
games
. Generally speaking,
video
games
is
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are
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 just
as
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like
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 any other tool or
devise
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device
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,
it
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they
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 can be useful or can be harmful,
it
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but it
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 just depends on how it's used.
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