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it is more important for a building to serve its purposes than to look beautiful. Architects do not need to worry about whether it is a real work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

#purposes #architects #work #art
It's more important for a
buidling
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building
 to serve its purposes than to look
beatuful
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beautiful
 and Architects don't have to
to
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worry about
is
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 it a real work of art or not.
First
 of all, what
is
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the role building plays in our life
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 Mostly they are the home to live in, a place to work, the school or the
univeristy
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university
 where we study, or
it's
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its
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recreational
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 facility, in overall aspect we will probably spend
two thirds
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 of our day inside or around these places. Imagine being surrounded by ugly structures all day long, plain walls flat surfaces, concrete and glass everywhere, how
this
 would affect us mentally
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 People suggesting that
beuaty
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beauty
 is a secondary or of less important things are probably
un aware
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unaware
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 of the
psychlogical
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psychological
 effect of modern life on
people
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people's
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 mental health,
in particular
 those
whom
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 live in cities. In my opinion, I believe that
in addition
 to the basic job it's made for, buildings shall look
beuatiful
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beautiful
 too, looking good is part of the mission, I'm not saying that architects must make pieces of art or open museums, or structures to
last
 for a thousand years, but there shall be a touch of humanity in the building, a touch of art that
also
nourshes
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nourishes
 the soul.
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