Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign laguage at the primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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primary school rather than secondary school, In

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less distracting stuff making it easier to learn new things. The

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the world with new eyes, watching documentaries from other countries,

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the literature of foreign civilisations creators and pioneers. Now, discussing the disadvantages, on one

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is not due to the education but it's is a symptom of other problems in the whole society. But are there any other downsides? actually, I don't see any other downside to

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doesn't reduce the time used to study other sciences.

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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign laguage at the primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.