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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some governments around the globe, are majorly concentrating to rise the
economy
 but some other individuals believe that more than the GDP some other things are
also
 important for a
nation
. I partially agree with the statement because for developing
countries
 everything is needed.
Firstly
, the
economy
 of a country is very important to improve their
nation
.
For instance
, implementing roads, railways, etc needs a good
economy
.
Moreover
, a plethora of
countries
are
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 trying to make their wealth good by attracting tourists.
Additionally
, a
nation
 with a good
economy
 represents, a
poverty
 level and unemployment are in a lower
rate
.
However
, these kinds of rising and rose
countries
 are spending vast sums of money on their military.
As a result
, development becomes slower and inventing new technologies for killing humans ourselves. According to a recent study, North Korea has a
poverty
rate
 of more than 60% but they spending their wealth on inventing nuclear weapons.
On the other hand
, there are some other
countries
 with starvation and higher
poverty
rate
, governments can spend their money there. More than the
economy
, there are some other things that are important for the
nation
,
such
 as a country of talented people, encouraging new research, lower pollution
rate
, etc. in the previous decade, many
countries
 concentrated to improve their GDP due to that carbon emission
rate
 has been increased by industries but now governments are concerned about global warming. In conclusion, I argue that the
economy
 of the
nation
 is very important but
this
 should not be raised by destroying nature. Meanwhile, more than spending their money on the military, they can spend it on starvation and
poverty
 to elevate humanity.
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