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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 think that having gender-based
schools
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 is more beneficial than mixed
schools
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 to educate children. In my opinion, mixed
schools
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 are more beneficial as it reflects a real-world scenario than a separate school, where everyone is of similar sexual orientation. Same-sex
schools
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 definitely have some benefits over mixed
schools
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,
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 as teachers' ability to focus on each student because there is less number of children in the classroom.
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, at same-sex
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,
people
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 will be more disciplined because there will be
less nuisance
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.
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, when there are only girls or boys in the class, everyone will be at
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 same pace in terms of understanding.
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, In a recent study, it is found that women learn faster than men, so it is beneficial to have
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 kind of
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 in the room.
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, mixed-gender
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 have a better reflection of
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 actual world, as in reality, boys and girls have to work with each other.
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, there will be
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healthy competition between the two genders, which is crucial for the overall development of students.
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, these types of
schools
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 can teach some important life lessons to
people
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 at
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 young age.
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, If a person has to go through a bad relationship with their friends or significant other, they can learn to move on with their life. In conclusion,
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 separate
schools
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 for boys and girls have some advantages, I feel students should study in mixed school as it mirrors
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 actual world and has more benefits because it teaches some important lessons about life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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