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Some believe that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while other think it is more important to reward students who show progress. Discuss both views and express your own opinion?

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Appreciation of
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 in the school will motivate them when moving forward in all aspects. Rewards and appreciations are memorable remarks in
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 during their school life.
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, there is a discussion based on two different viewpoints as
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 have to be rewarded based on their academic results or based on their growth. We will discuss both views from the following and I would share my personal viewpoint on the same. On the one side of the argument, there is a viewpoint that the best academic outcome should be rewarded.
Students
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 are with so many capabilities and different
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 of memory and analytical capacities. There are
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 with significant
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 of IQ and intelligent level that lead to achieving any boundaries of academic qualification. When considering the academic rewards, it is kind of limiting
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 and capturing only the subject's knowledge based on an examination. As an example, the
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 three Sri Lankans are rewarded based on the streamwise results during the General Certificate of Education Advance level examination.
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this
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 examination evaluates the subject knowledge the
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 will be highly motivated and it will a base for their higher education path.
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, another side of the argument is that
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 should be rewarded based on their
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.
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, most
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 are capable in academic aspects there are
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 with hidden talents and capabilities that should
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 be rewarded and appreciated. Reaching the highest
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 through sports, dancing, arts, debating and innovative skills
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 should be rewarded. The
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 of a student can be evaluated based on different
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 as academic
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, personality, other talents achievements and presentation of themselves.
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, the highest ranked in the academic qualification
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 can be a participant in the Olympic games in the future who can be pride to the nation. In conclusion, both sides of the argument have their own merits. On ,balance how I feel that it is important to reward
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 based on both academic results and their
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 since
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 have different shades and every shade
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 a value and everyone should be appreciated.
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 are the future of the world.
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,
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 should be shown their colours based on every angle and all of them should be rewarded.

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