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Some employers are giving more value on hiring people with good social skills apart from good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that social skills are just as crucial as good qulification for success work?

#employers #value #people #skills #qualifications #qulification #success #work
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Nowadays, most
of
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the compaines
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compaines
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companies
 recruit
people
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 which have better
softskills
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soft skills
 rather than
educations
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education
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.
Some thing
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 that social
skill
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 plays
vital
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a vital
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 role in future as
compered
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compared
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 to experience and
qulification
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qualification
qualifications
. I
am favour
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with
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this
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 point of view because
todays
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today's
 technology has spread in
world
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the world
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,
it
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 is equally important to education. My explanation is in the
enusing
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ensuing
 paragraphs.
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 with, these days company's
manager
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managers
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 more
focus
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focuses
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 on
interpernoal
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interpersonal
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skill
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skills
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.
Beacuse
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Because
, in
these modern era
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this modern era
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,
people
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 are more
socialzed
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socialized
 with internet
platform
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platforms
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such
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,
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apply
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face book
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facebook
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,
instagram
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Instagram
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,
twitter
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Twitter
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 and other
socia
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social
 apps. So, it is easy to convince individuals.
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,
todays
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today
today's
, online business has increased,
it
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do
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 not
required
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require
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 any
equcation
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equation
education
qualification
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 that only required communication
skill
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.
Moreover
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, some types of
job
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jobs
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 only need
to
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soft
skills
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such
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markting
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marketing
,
managment
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management
,
human
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and human
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resorces
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resources
 (HR) all these types of
job
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jobs
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requied
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required
 good communication.
On the other hand
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, If
people
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 want to be
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a success
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success
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 in their work, they would have good education or experience as well as interpersonal
skills
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. The director of
company
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the company
a company
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 should
giving
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give
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equally
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equal
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 value
of
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to
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a qualification
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qualification
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qualifications
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 and soft
skills
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.
For instance
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, some technical jobs like technician, engineer and
others
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other
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that
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types of
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the profession
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profession
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professions
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 have
also
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 experience.
Hence
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, company
director
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directors
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 are
appiont
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appoint
appointed
employee
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employees
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 that
depand
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depend
depends
 on role jobs. In conclusion,
people
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devloped
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developed
 their education
qualification
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,
similarlly
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similarly
 they
also
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devloped
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developed
 communication or social
skills
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 because
,
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apply
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 in
this
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 technical era
people
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 know
allready
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already
situation
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the situation
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 of
market
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the market
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. So, it is too hard
covince
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convince
 to human beings.
Therefore
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, I agree with
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a view
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view point
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viewpoint
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 to
socail
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social
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skill
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skills
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important
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are important
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 as
good
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a good
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qualification
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foe
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for
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 victory
on
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in
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 work.
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