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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy , with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this ?

#people #home #workplace #place
In
this
 rapid ,world we live in, much more arguments that were seen as not important have turned on the surface.Keeping our living and working
environment
 neat with all objects in their right places may be seen as a good act but
this
 essay believes that there are a lot of drawbacks to
this
 act that no one talks about. I will be discussing my point of view and justify it throughout the essay.
First
 and foremost, tidying your room will probably be a waste of time.To clarify, spending an hour every day organizing objects by putting them in the right places has no clear benefit.I personally believe that tidying your room should be superseded by reading, practising sports and socializing.
As a result
,
this
 act would stimulate healthy life and more mental stability.
Although
 messy does not always mean nasty I believe that grasping that line between them really matters. Having a clean
environment
 is important and should be done
instead
 of making everything look good. Not only does tidying your room waste your time, indeed it will probably eliminate innovation.
For instance
, artists, musicians and actors fuel their mind-taking works with how messy and chaotic the world they live in is. As a consequence, less tidy living and working environments will boost innovation and broaden our horizons with a much more important type of aesthetic which is creativity. In conclusion, While it is important for us to stop trying to make our living and working
environment
 look nice due to time waste and its effect on innovation, I believe having a clean
environment
 should be taken into account.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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