Some people work for the same organisation in all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some individual would agree to
work
in the same institutions in
their entire career. Change preposition
for
Although
, others believe Correct word choice
However
to seek
Change preposition
that seeking
job
with multiple companies would be better. Add an article
a job
This
essay would argue that, eventhough
working in the same company gives stability, others would prefer to Correct your spelling
even though
work
for different establishments that provides
more professional growth. IChange the verb form
provide
,
believe Remove the comma
apply
with
a lot of Change preposition
that
experience
it
gives more Correct pronoun usage
apply
better
opportunity to enhance Correct article usage
a better
professional
skills.
Employees opted to stay in the same agency for the rest of their lives because of the comforts they enjoyed at Correct pronoun usage
my professional
work
. Moreover
, it would be the familiarization of the same routine in job
description Add an article
the job
a job
that is
being applied and the established rapport among colleagues. For instance
, Philippines, the unemployment rate is still high wherein workers has
no choice but to stick Change the verb form
have
on
the same agency until the contract Change preposition
with
would be
terminated rather than being jobless. Wrong verb form
is
However
, I believe if men and women would venture to work
in different organizations it would bring better career advancement.
On the other hand
, engaging with different organisations learned
many exposure to people's Verb problem
taught
culture
, languages and institutional policies. Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
In addition
, wide experience
, knowledge, good communication and skills gained from different firms possibly offer attractive salary
and Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
high- level
Correct your spelling
high-level
position
. Fix the agreement mistake
positions
For example
, recently an employer in Kuwait recruited in Philippines
and Correct article usage
the Philippines
prefer
to hire applicants with Middle Wrong verb form
preferred
East
Replace the word
Eastern
experience
who could converse very well in arabic
. I, Change the capitalization
Arabic
therefore
, believe as the saying goes that "experience
is the best teacher".
In conclusion, although
some people decided
to settle in the same workplace for security Wrong verb form
decide
reason
but less opportunity to grow as human beings Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
whilst
I, believe in the Correct word choice
apply
others
view, it would be more rewarding to engage with different companies because Change noun form
other's
others'
this
gives more essence to their chosen profession.Submitted by namlaemy on
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