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Describe your overall study experience at this university and let us know what worked and what didnot

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Introduction
My experience at
the
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Shahed
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Shahid
University
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 was, overall, a very positive one. I gained a great deal of knowledge that has made it possible for me to progress toward my goals.
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By obtaining my degree I have opened a gateway towards
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professional employment and career development. By learning skills
such
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 as leadership, time
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management ، Crisis Management ، and team working I have been able to prove that I can take on jobs as a Mid-level manager in companies.
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Although
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, because of
university
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 policy, the students
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 not able to take
internship
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an internship
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 during
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the semester
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 , so we could not
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 our knowledge in
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real world
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untill
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until
 after graduation.
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On the other hand
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, one of my
bigest
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biggest
consern
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concern
 was that, If I want to
imigarte
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emigrate
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 to another
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is
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my knowledge about
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management
 international or not
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 for
this
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reason
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 I always
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 to be updated and In parallel attending in various workshops and conferences
which
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most of
them
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holding
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by
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my
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university
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the university
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,
that
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it
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big
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 opportunity for me.
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Overall,
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university
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 has had a very positive impact on my life and on my development both
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personally and professionally. Truly, I really missed for
university
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atmosfer
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atmosphere
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also
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 being in
campos
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 or attending
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class again.

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