Describe your overall study experience at this university and let us know what worked and what didnot

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My experience at

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Shahed

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Shahid

University

was, overall, a very positive one. I gained a great deal of knowledge that has made it possible for me to progress toward my goals. By obtaining my degree I have opened a gateway towards professional employment and career development. By learning skills

such

as leadership, time management ، Crisis Management ، and team working I have been able to prove that I can take on jobs as a Mid-level manager in companies.

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university

policy, the students

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not able to take

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our knowledge in

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real world

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after graduation.

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my knowledge about

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international or not

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to be updated and In parallel attending in various workshops and conferences

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opportunity for me. Overall,

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has had a very positive impact on my life and on my development both personally and professionally. Truly, I really missed for

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atmosphere

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also

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class again.

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Describe your overall study experience at this university and let us know what worked and what didnot

Fully explain your ideas

Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotic and as a result people garvitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Most people in the world have to work to earn a living. However, many people work only for the financial gain that it involves, and not for any other rewards that a job can offer. What do you think the main consideration when deciding what job to take should be?