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In your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars?

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Nowadays, society already has a wide range of environmental problems
such
 as global warming and deforestation. Pollution is one of the most severe issues people face nowadays, and vehicles make a huge impact on its increasing. Electric
cars
 can become one of the solutions to
this
 problem. In
order
 to make electric
cars
 more attractive for people and make them embrace
such
 a type of transport, the market must be full of various brands of
such
 vehicles in any price, size,
color
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, and other characteristics. In
order
 to provide it, it must be profitable for businesses to produce them. It means that the government needs to provide some tax incentives for producers or find another way to make the production of electric
cars
 more attractive and profitable for businesses. At the same time, it is necessary to attract clients and make the usage of electric
cars
 more comfortable. In
order
 to achieve it, the whole infrastructure must be built. It means that charge stations must be located not only throughout the city but
also
 in the suburban and rural areas. The number of repair stations for gas and electric
cars
 must be equal. The usage of electric
cars
 must be as comfortable as possible. Summing up, in
order
 to increase the production of electric
cars
, it is necessary to make them more profitable than gas
cars
.
Also
, it is necessary to rid of the problems that owners of electric
cars
 face nowadays. One of the government and producers' goals must be to make the usage of them as much comfortable as the gas
cars
 have nowadays.
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