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More and more people move from the countryside to big cities. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages to the environment?

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recently many people go from the environment to the big
city
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 to change their life or even to fulfil their family who is living in the village where they stay. In
this
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 essay, I would like to explain more about the advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
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 as what we see in the
city
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 nowadays, it provides many job vacancies compared to the
countryside
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. of ,course living in the
city
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 brings more income and development to the community in the village to change their life.
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, these types of people will get more saving money and it will give them the opportunity to live life happily and be more satisfied.
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, moving to the
city
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 from the
countryside
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 is
such
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 a good development
to
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 a person.
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, since living in the
city
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 lead to a place to get a higher salary, a group of people from the
countryside
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 tend to be a favourite place for seeking additional income to feed their family in the villages.
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, they can
also
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 save more money for making a small business in the village later after retiring from
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working hours in the
city
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. to sum up,
i
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 do believe living in the
city
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 brings opportunities to a local person from the
countryside
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 a good activity in the future whether to their lifestyle or their family.
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