some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools . others, however, believe taht boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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considered

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that

tourism

brings significant money to many

countries

, despite

this

it can be

also

a reason for some obstacles.

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essay will argue that the advantages of

tourism

outweigh the drawbacks. The essay will

first

demonstrate that

tourism

brings to

countries

such

advantages as economic growth and

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cultural exchange, and outline the illegal business as a disadvantage. The main benefit

from

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tourism

is that tourists bring a lot of money which stimulates the economical rise. To put it another way, many developing

countries

do not have industrial progress, they

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up because of

tourism

which means that for these

countries

it is a significant income to the budget.

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,

such

a country as Greece,

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was the

first

country who opened for

tourism

during the pandemic situation, because

they

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couldn't manage

with

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the debts without income from

tourism

.

Moreover

,

tourism

also

brings

such

benefit

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benefits

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as cultural exchange,

countries

demonstrate to foreigners their traditions which lead to

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experience and provoke people to know more about the culture, languages and food of a particular country. A recent survey by BBC travel showed that 40% of people would like to study the Italian language after they visited Italy. The main disadvantage which can be caused by

tourism

is that recently many illegal businesses have increased in developing

countries

. Local people sell to tourists poor quality things and mostly

this

commerce is illegal

,

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because sellers do not register their business in an official way.

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, France try to reduce

the

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illegal selling and the government took measures

such

as

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up police posts at tourist sites to monitor illegal trade. To conclude,

although

there is a

drawback

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drawbacks

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of

tourism

, namely, the rising of illegal trade,

thre

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there

are outweighed by the benefits,

such

as the significant rise of economic and cultural exchange which can bring

tourism

.