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some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools . others, however, believe taht boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some that a
university
 degree can bring prospective
work
, while others think that it is better to skip
university
 time and directly start to build a
career
. In my opinion, there are some jobs which require academic
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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, but
also
 there are others where more important
long
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work
experience
then
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than
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university
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 background.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints. On the one hand, there is an opinion that
university
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a university
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 education is essential for building a future
career
 and can be very problematic to find good
work
 without a diploma. To put it
in other words
, companies look for the best candidates and request the relevant background in a particular area. It is difficult to argue against
this
 view as long as
such
 areas of employment as,
for instance
, medical or engineering fields require
a certain knowledge
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certain knowledge
a piece of certain knowledge
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, and it is impossible to get a job in these areas without an academic base.
On the other hand
, many disagree and claim that
university
 knowledge is not a vital part
for
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of
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 getting a good job and
work
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that work
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experience
 is more crucial.
In other words
, if
candidate
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a candidate
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start
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starts
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 to
work
 right after graduating from
the
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apply
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school, he/she gets
a
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apply
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necessary
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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 in practice and can achieve (?)
the
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apply
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career
 goals faster,
then
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than
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 opponents who spend
this
 time in
university
.
This
 may be true for some particular jobs, especially in some commercial or marketing spheres, where is more important to have personal skills as a communicative which can be easily gotten during the
work
.
For example
, if youngsters started to
work
 as an assistant in a commercial field, it would be possible that in 1 year they will be promoted
as
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a
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apply
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specialist, and in 3 years will be a significant
experience
. To conclude,
although
 it is still believed by many that a
university
 degree is a crucial thing for achieving
career
 goals, others advocate that it is better to get
work
experience
 into the
work
 process. In my opinion, it all
depend
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depends
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of
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on
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working
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the working
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 field, and
university
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a university
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 diploma is very essential for professions
as
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such as
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 doctor or
engineer
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engineering
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, while there are specialities where
university
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a university
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 background is not a significant part and more important to have a long
work
experience
 in some areas
such
 as marketing or commerce.
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