Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that
cinema
plays a significant role in entertainment
industry. Some Add an article
the entertainment
people
believe that due to
the various online streaming platforms, movie theaters
are less Change the spelling
theatres
prefered
by individuals nowadays. Personally, I partially agree with Correct your spelling
preferred
this
statement because of rationales
Correct article usage
the rationales
followings
.
To commence with, Correct your spelling
following
due to
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the availablility
availablility
of movies and web series in a single platform, Correct your spelling
availability
people
are not only enjoy
in their desired place but Change the verb form
are not only enjoying
also
they can watch anything according to
their mood. For instance
, Netflix and Amazon Prime are the most popular online screaming
websites in various Correct your spelling
streaming
coun tries
, and Correct your spelling
countries
also
available in
cheaper rates which attracts more individuals. Change preposition
at
Morover
, it is undeniable that after covid pandemic most of the upcoming movies are now released at Correct your spelling
Moreover
over the top
(OOT) platforms. Add a hyphen
over-the-top
Therefore
, these are the reasons why people
are going towards online platforms.
On the other hand
, many people
argue that cinema
is still popular among masses
because Correct article usage
the masses
in
weekends working Change preposition
at
people
and teenagers are more likely to go with their acquaintance
and families, watch Fix the agreement mistake
acquaintances
latest
pictures and spend quality time with them. Correct article usage
the latest
Furthermore
, if movies are watching
in Wrong verb form
watched
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a theater
theater
, the experience is real, it feels like a person Change the spelling
theatre
are
actually Correct subject-verb agreement
is
feel
the character, emotions which is somehow not possible Wrong verb form
feeling
in
electronic devices. Change preposition
on
Thus
, in
some Change preposition
to
extent
Add a comma
extent,
cinema
is still relevant.
In conclusion, due the
benefits of Change preposition
to the
over the top
(OTT) Add a hyphen
over-the-top
such
as they are cheaper and are
very flexible Unnecessary verb
apply
i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
cinema
is major
factor that plays Add an article
a major
the major
important
role in humans life because they can Correct article usage
an important
spent
free time with their loved ones.Change the verb form
spend
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