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The bar chart compares the use of the
internet
 by
adults
 from five different
age
 groups between 2003 and 2006. Looking from an overall perspective, the
percentage
 of
adults
 aged 16-24 using the
internet
 was significantly high.
Additionally
, the use of the
internet
 by all
age
 groups increased, with the only exception
for
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the 16-24
age
group
 which decreased over a period of 4 years. In the year 2003, the
percentage
 of
adults
 using the
internet
 was highest, at 80%, followed by the 45-54
age
group
, at 60%. The figures for the 25-44 and the 55-64 were lower, at 50% and at 30% respectively. The oldest
group
 accounted for the lowest figure, at only 18%. In the period from 2003 to 2005, the
percentage
 of the youngest
age
group
 who used the
internet
 on a daily basis witnessed a steady rise of approximately 20% while the figures for the 25-44 and the 45-54
also
 experienced a gradual increase, to 70% and to 78% respectively.
By contrast
, there was a small drop in the proportions of
internet
 users belonging to the 55-64 and 65+. The period between 2005 and 2006 saw a fall in the
percentage
 of the youngest
adults
 who used the
internet
 while a substantial rise of 17% in the
percentage
 of
internet
 users belonging to the 55-64
age
group
.
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