Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their studies in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

Concentration difficulties or not paying enough attention to lessons has been one of the big issues facing children, parents, and teachers for years, draining a lot of time,
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, and putting heavy burdens on all
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of reasons leading to pupils' loss of concentration during classes. the
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cause would be domestic troubles, minors are very sensitive to instabilities, divorces, any of the
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absence, violence, financial problems,
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, malnutrition, or unstable daily schedule resulting in
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of suitable sleeping hours, study time, and enough period to play and have fun so Juniors can release their energy. The other factors are
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system which doesn't consider what type of sciences the kids are attracted
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art,
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biology, and others are fond
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history,
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the educational techniques and materials that in many cases are boring and forces
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to fall a sleep.
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problems, Homes shall provide
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haven to the young and schools
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to be appealing and pay attention to how the service is provided and how to yield what is fruitful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Concentration
  • Engagement
  • Curriculum
  • Attention span
  • Learning disorders
  • Interactive learning
  • Personalized learning
  • Supportive learning environment
  • Mental health
  • Organizational skills
  • Educational policy
  • Mindfulness
  • Screen time
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