Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

Some people believe that the main obstacle after graduation from
school
in a lot of countries is unemployment. I totally agree with
this
statement, I think it is a
school
problem because lots of schools don't help
students
with employment to the
job
.
Moreover
,
school
leavers face other serious troubles in adulthood.
First
and foremost , plenty of
students
don't know how to act
in particular
situations due to their lack of specific knowledge in that
field
. After finishing
school
students
get to know many things,
however
,
this
education is limited and is not enough.
For example
, despite everybody facing money every day only a few educational places provide economics or management. It causes a lack of pupils' knowledge in
this
field
and they can not compete with more professional people who have more specific education.
Also
, I think
that is
the main reason why graduates struggle with employment. The
next
reason why unemployment remains the biggest challenge to
students
is the undeveloped
field
that
students
have chosen. A graduate might be without work because the sphere which he has learned is not in demand.
For instance
, my friend studied biochemistry for 5 years and planned to have a
job
correlated with the usage of alternative energy. Unfortunately, in ,Kazakstan
this
field
is not in demand ,so it is almost impossible to find a
job
. To conclude, despite the fact that the major problem after graduation for
students
is to find a
job
, there are lots of other problems which face young people.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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