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In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reason and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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In the era of science and technology, our world has become a competitive zone, a worker has to require different skills and knowledge to win in life. Which include
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 good qualifications or social skills.
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 being friendly and nice to others is good but that
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being excellent and receiving good recommendation in any field of life you find yourself,
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 to give you an upper hand above others.
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, private sectors or one man's
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need employees who are
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 and hardworking
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 how they related to
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. In some cases, special jobs
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. For
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who's works
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 food in a restaurant may not really interact with the customers that troops in and out. The
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 of the cookers
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 the make sure the dish is well prepared and
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 of the restaurant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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