One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think solutions are?

Nowadays almost in each huge urban
cities
traffic jams are getting higher and higher. From my point of
view
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the main solution for
this
issue can be using
the
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public transport the most rather
that
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private
cars
. The number of
people
are
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owning private
cars
day by day, because humans found having private
cars
more convenient rather than using some
kind
of public or compact kids of
transports
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, so
that
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perhaps in each
countries
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, especially in large urban
cities
this
way of using transport is the main problem for drivers. The main cause of
this
can be the narrow roads, where drivers are always facing
with
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this
in each rush
hours
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. At that time
people
always have some kids of difficult problems with traffic while they go to their work or study or when come back from that places.
From
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other
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side,
population
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the population
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in big urban
cities
is getting higher, so
this
can be
main
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big problem of traffic
congestions
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. Each family has at least 1 car or more,
what
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means
majority
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the majority
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of
people
do not
chose
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public
transports
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transport
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.
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, if each person will have his or her own
cars
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it
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the near future, of
course
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there will be
huge
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amount of problems than now.
However
, in
this
situation
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humans are able to get out
from
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this
issue by using public
transports
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transport
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,
such
as trains or buses
,
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because
this
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these kinds
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kind
of
transports
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are
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cheap enough to use.
On the other
hand
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this
kind
of transportation available every time despite
of
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some
kind
of conditions and buses
are always have
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their direct schedule.
For example
, in the biggest city in the world in
Singapore
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each street has
their
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own public transport, but not each person has
their
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personal
cars
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. So that, perhaps roads are not full of some
kind
of
peoples
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private
cars
. To conclude, if
people
will start using buses or trains in huge
cities
, they will be able to reach their
destination
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without damaging their mood.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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