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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think solutions are?

#city #traffic #congestion
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Nowadays almost in each huge urban
cities
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 traffic jams are getting higher and higher. From my point of
view
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 the main solution for
this
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 issue can be using
the
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public transport the most rather
that
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than
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 private
cars
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. The number of
people
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are
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owning private
cars
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 day by day, because humans found having private
cars
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 more convenient rather than using some
kind
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 of public or compact kids of
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transports
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, so
that
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perhaps in each
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, especially in large urban
cities
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this
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 way of using transport is the main problem for drivers. The main cause of
this
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 can be the narrow roads, where drivers are always facing
with
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this
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 in each rush
hours
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. At that time
people
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 always have some kids of difficult problems with traffic while they go to their work or study or when come back from that places.
From
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other
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another
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 side,
population
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the population
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 in big urban
cities
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 is getting higher, so
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 can be
main
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a main
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 big problem of traffic
congestions
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congestion
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. Each family has at least 1 car or more,
what
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 means
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 do not
chose
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 public
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transports
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transport
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.
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, if each person will have his or her own
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cars
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car
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it
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 the near future, of
course
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 there will be
huge
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 amount of problems than now.
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, in
this
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situation
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 humans are able to get out
from
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this
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 issue by using public
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transports
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transport
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,
such
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 as trains or buses
,
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 because
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this
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these kinds
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kind
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 of
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transports
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are
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 cheap enough to use.
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hand
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this
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kind
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 of transportation available every time despite
of
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some
kind
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 of conditions and buses
are always have
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 their direct schedule.
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, in the biggest city in the world in
Singapore
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 each street has
their
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its
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 own public transport, but not each person has
their
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 personal
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cars
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. So that, perhaps roads are not full of some
kind
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 of
peoples
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private
cars
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. To conclude, if
people
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 will start using buses or trains in huge
cities
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, they will be able to reach their
destination
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 without damaging their mood.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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