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Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending in health education and preventive measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a fact that preventing from being sick is more beneficial than
treatment
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Governments
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 by increasing the budget for training healthy lifestyles and investing in
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 sector will be benefited rather than spending on caring for and curing patients.
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, investing in
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 education and public awareness, help to reduce diseases and save money. Costs of
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 and hospitals are high in most countries,
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,
treatment
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 has a huge cost for
governments
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 too. Because
governments
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 want to equip hospitals with sophisticated medical technologies and equipment.
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, these tools put a huge burden on
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, the number of diabetics is increasing, in my country, while awareness and education can prevent or keep the speed of incidence of diabetes or heart disease.
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 steps toward
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 education will help to reduce the cost of
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 and the number of patients in near future.
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, Several
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 combat some diseases
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 as poor sanitation, viruses, and heart diseases. While prevention help to reduce the infection of
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 problems
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 if
governments
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 do some actions.
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, some
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 can make more parks, gyms and fitness buildings with lower costs rather than making more
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 centres. The more people exercise, the fewer heart disease and diabetes will happen.
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 may enable informing and educating the public about their
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, and above all, by allocating a portion of the budget to preventive measures to heighten public awareness. In conclusion, I agree with increasing the budget for educating people having a healthy lifestyle and doing preventive measures rather than spending on equipping hospitals and
treatment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • health education
  • treatment
  • health budget
  • divert
  • health problems
  • awareness
  • healthy habits
  • behaviors
  • vaccinations
  • screenings
  • check-ups
  • early detection
  • burden on the healthcare system
  • resources
  • infectious diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • quality of life
  • balancing
  • wellbeing
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