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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SPACE EXPLORATION IS A WASTE OF RESOURCES, WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT IT IS ESSENTIAL FOR MANKIND TO CONTINUE TO EXPLORE THE UNIVERSE IN WHICH WE LIVE. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR VALUABLE OPINION.

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It is an undeniable fact that different
space
 researchers love to explore
things
, which is related to astrology.
Also
, it is good to research various
space related
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things
such
 as resources and atmosphere, but in
this
space
 exploration, scientists have been
uses
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using
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large
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the large
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sum
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 of
money
 to evaluate
his
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their
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 tasks, while from
this
 huge amount
money
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of money
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 people
fulfill
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 their basic needs, which improves working life as well as good for mankind.
To begin
 with,
space
 programs are important to gain information about
universe
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the universe
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.
Also
, from the use of
this
 program, individuals and children
curious
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are curious
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 to learn new
things
 about planets
such
 as different
environment
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environments
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, locations, speed and
light related
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 programs and so on.
In addition
, it will beneficial for children as well as youngster personal growth, because
this
 kind of research
contain
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 a huge time to success,
as a result
, adolescent and adults improve their knowledge about
space
 and it will help them to get a higher success rate compared to any other field.
On the other hand
, the ocean amount of
money
 taken by the government to complete tasks related to
space
, while
this
 long length digits of
money
 can use in
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to develop
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develop
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developing
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 certain
things
, which make a safe and secure life for inhabitants.
Moreover
,
this
space
 exploration takes a long time to get success,
as a result
, the government take a loan from different nations and
this
 is a heavy burden on the nation, if the government do not pay the bills on time
than
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then
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 it will create
negative
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a negative
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 effect on the particular nation. In a nutshell, I personally believe that the merits of
this
 exploration contain a lot of negative sides, which is not good for the
country
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country's
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 growth.
Therefore
, I think that the fund can
be use
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 in mankind
instead
 of
this
 research.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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