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Students should be taught the academic subjects only in the schools not the practical skills like cooking. To what extent di you agree or disagree?

#students #subjects #schools #skills
Needless to say, the
school
institution
play
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 a vital role in the student's life in terms of career perspective.Some people
habour
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harbour
 a belief that
majority
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the majority
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 of the time spending in
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school
 rather than
home
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at home
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,
therefore
institution
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institutions
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 should teach the
parctical
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practical
 skill along with
the
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academic subjects.In my opinion, I tend to stand with the former statement to the former statement by considering several facts. In
this
eassy
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essay
easy
, I will elaborate on the
postive
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positive
 aspects of
these tread
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this tread
these treads
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 and
thus
 to a logical conclusion. There are
myraid
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myriad
 of
the
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reasons to agree with the
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meritorious
 side. The
First
 and Foremost reason is that
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environment
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 issue is
the
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 big tread to the global world,
therefore
 the
institution
 should organize some events on the weekends providing
the
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valuable information about
benefical
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beneficial
 of
the
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tree and
encourage
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 them to plant trees. Another observation in
this
 regard is that most of the students are able to manage
the
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their
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times
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time
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 effectively by involving various activities,
teacher
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the teacher
a teacher
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 should
providing
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provide
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 the
valuable
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of
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the
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time and help them to prepare the timetable.
It's
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 definitely
help
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helps
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 them in every phase of
the
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their
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 life.
Secondly
,by taking the children
to
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on
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 educational
trip
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trips
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 more
chance
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chances
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of
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to
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earn
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earning
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the
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team skill
in
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at
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the
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a
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 young age and
able
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be able
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 to make many friends.
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Furthermore
, the
institution
get
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place
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a place
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 in the top
school
 and more parents are interested to
enroll
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 their children in the
school
.
Hence
, it is apparent that all the points are stands in
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good stead. To conclude,
aforementioned
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 reasons are instrumental indeed.
Consequently
, I firmly agree with the given statement.
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