Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime

Rising crime among young individuals is
main
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problem in most
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the
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countries. There are several factors
caused
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the increase
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the
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crime. The major factor is lack of education,
such
as race, social status, economy, and cultural identity.
Government
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does not have awareness of them. Another factor is
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loss of attention in
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a family
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which means that families may not attention to their children.
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, parents do not probably know their desires and how to get adequate love.
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factor is difficulty in finding an
occupation
.
This
leads to
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involved in illegal activities which is to be stealing money to continue their life. Turning to
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solution, an obvious step would be
volunteering
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course to support
them
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who
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not have
occupation
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an occupation
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. If we took
this
step, it could change their life to get
occupation
.
A second solutions
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might be open many anti-violence courses that
helps
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children learn
way
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of violence to avoid
commit
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the
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crime.
Finally
, Young people should develop themselves to learn
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new
thing
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and read books.
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would be prevented from using weapons. In summary, the factors of lack of education
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loss of family’s attention and difficulty in finding
occupation
appear to be the main causes. A volunteering program and
anti- violence
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anti-violence
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courses can
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the crimes among young people.
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