In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In some countries, elderly
people
often
to
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live at
retirement
houses where there are nurses to look after them, and the governments have to
support
the operating cost of
retirement
houses. There are debates on who should pay for
this
care
, either
government
or families.
This
essay will discuss both points of view with an explanation.
Firstly
, everyone will walk on
this
path, all
people
will get old. Along with it, many
people
have a plan for their
retirement
days.
Thus
, many countries have
adapted
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retirement
schemes for all citizens and taxes payers have paid taxes which should be used for their
care
in future.
For instance
, the
government
will
support
nursing
home
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homes
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and
retirement
homes so that there can be structured to provide the right
support
and
care
for old
people
.
On the other hand
, all the duty should not only
put
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at
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government
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the government
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. Family should
support
the elderly person when they have the ability to
care
for their
parents
.
Furthermore
, family is more understanding
the
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needs of the elderly, some of them prefer to be surrounded by familiar
people
, places and objects. The most important is nursing
home
only provide
support
but not the love that elderly
people
needs. From my own experience,taking
care
of my grandfather,
it
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is sometimes been hard because we
all
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are all
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not trained to take
care
elderly and sometimes it is hard
to
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our family, especially my
parents
,
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when my both
parents
need to rotate to be at
home
to provide the necessary
support
. In my conclusion, both of
government
and the family should be a part to
support
elderly
people
, when families have
an
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ability to
care
their
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parents
,they should take
the
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responsible
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and
government
should continue to
support
the
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nursing
home
and
retirement
homes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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