Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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will take the half glass empty than full
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people
. It is so much easier to criticize or to let oneself go without doing anything than fight to stay happy. Happiness can be maintained and is an energetic practice. It would be interesting to know how social networking
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positive or negative
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on both individuals and society in a particular sector
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behaviours (sociability), companies’ business (economy), ecology (sustainability) or policy (lobby)
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would be simplifying the organisation of events between friends. It is not necessary to contact a person by a person. We can send a group message and it is finished in a few seconds. Another positive point would be bringing
people
together from around the world.
People
might meet themselves and create a family (Facebook dating
for example
). WhatsApp is
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practical to send multimedia files, photos, pdf, word, excel… The main negative impact would be
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people
’s loneliness which can lead to depression and a sedentary lifestyle. These so long-term negative impacts can cause diseases. I would agree to say that social networking represents more
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behaviours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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