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Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. To what extent do you agree with this idea ?

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Needless to say,
tourism
 is the backbone of many countries. Some
people
 harbour a belief that
tourism's
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boost
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of
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the
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economic growth
in addition
that
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 which allows
people
 of different nations to understand each other.From my perspective,
i
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 tend to stand to agree with the statement. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the positive aspects of these threads and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriad reasons to agree with the meritorious reasons. The
first
 and Foremost reason is
that
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due to
low
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 cost of
the
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flight in the global world, which
encourage
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people
 to travel around the world.
As a result
, to get
know
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to know
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 about
the
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other cultures and traditions by visiting those new places.Another positive outlook in
this
 regard is that many of the workaholic
people
 working
in
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the
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busy hectic schedules and
vacation
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vacations
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 allow the chance to spend quality time with friends and family and get relieved from stress buster.
Furthermore
,
tourism
 is boost backbone of the country's economy
in
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many countries.
For instance
, Dubai and Switzerland's
countries
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countries'
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 economy relies on
tourism
.
As a result
, Government uses that money to allocate a budget for development.
However
, the over-population in the historic places
which
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lead
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 to
a
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 destruction of the ancient place.
Therefore
, Government should take necessary actions by enforcing the strict law of limiting allowance and renovating
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building
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 from time to time. In short, the fall inducement of its bright side is self-evident. To sum up, the
above aforementioned
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 reasons are instrumental indeed.
However
, the drawbacks should not be considered.
Consequently
, I firmly agree with the given statement.
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  • to illustrate
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