Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as music attending college or university. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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college

univetsity

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university

. I will put my thought into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. Nowadays most

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university

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knowledge and will become a better leader and speaker in the future

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online education is beneficial for

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citizens I believe that students should be taught at

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and

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because in recent times distance learning cannot replace the old methods.

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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as music attending college or university. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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