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Many people use distance learning program to study at home , but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or university. To what extent do you agree and disagree

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Nowadays, many
people
 think that studying at a college or university is better and the best alternative
than
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 studying at home . In paragraphs to come ,we shall see both
she
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perspective
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 and l shall put forth my views. To know more deeply, it is true that
paper based
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 study is an old
method
. In
this
 terms
of
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modern
people
 are keen to replace it with internet resources and comforts . On top of that , many
people
 are learning online and online learning is better and more convenient, as they will
acquires
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 knowledge and knowledge.
For instance
, many
people
applies
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 and
they
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have duties so they always learn at home . They
unable
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are unable
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 to attend college or university but they can conduct their online class according to their schedules.
On the other hand
 when thinking it is
clean
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clear
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 that online education cannot replace the old
method
 of teaching . As
this
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these
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changes can
negative
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 influence
on
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their interpersonal skills ,
such
 as communication and cooperation with peers .ln
this
 regards face to face communication is crucial for
the
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students . Due to
which
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this
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 they enhance more knowledge and will become a good leader and speaker in the future.
For example
 , who cannot or do not make an effort
communicate
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to communicate
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 with other
people
this
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apply
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will turn to lack can damage
to
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their career opportunities . In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 become of the opinion
online
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that online
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 studying is beneficial for citizens ,
therefore
 with regarding
method
.
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is .
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 I believe and know that students should be taught at
university
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universities
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 and other academic institutions. What's more, most students and citizens benefit
distance
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 learning. Distance learning become
old
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an old
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method
 and most
people
 continue to use
this
method
and
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distance learning cannot replace the old
method
.
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