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1. Why and how did the
Safavid
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 shahs introduce the Christian element? With the introduction of
Caucasian
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the Caucasian
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Cristian
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Christian
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 element to the court Heurum during the
reign
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 of Tahmasib I,Caucasian slaves emerged
major
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as major
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 ethnic forces of the
Safavid
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empire
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.
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, during the
reign
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 of Shah Abbas I, the Christian population and Jewish community of the
Safavid
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empire
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 behaved with
the
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apply
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high respect and tolerance. There was no religious persecution during the
reign
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 of Shah Abbas I. Western primary sources
implies
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imply
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 that the construction of churches commenced in
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 period. 2. What major events and processes changed the history of
Azerbaijan
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 in the 18
centuries
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century
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?
In
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 the beginning of the 18th century, there was started the political, economic, and political decline of Muslim empires.
This
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 period was
also
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 called as “Global 18th century”. There was a deep political and socio-economical crisis in
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Safavid
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the Safavid
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empire
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. Afterwards, the Afsharid state was established by
NadirShah
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Nadir Shah
 in 1736. He was the potent ruler of
Turkic
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the Turkic
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 and Islamic
world
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worlds
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.
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, the lost territories of the
Safavid
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empire
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was
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were
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 returned during the
reign
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 of Nadir Shah I. Unfortunately, after his assassination in 1747,
Azerbaijan
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divided
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was divided
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 into several
khanates
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. 3. Explain Azerbaijani
Khanates
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 making and breaking alliances policy The constant conflict and internal struggle prevented
unification
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the unification
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 of
Azerbaijan
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. The rise and strengthening of regional powers led to the end of
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khanates’
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the khanates’
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 dream to unify and create a holistic
Azerbaijan
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. Despite the attempt to unify
Azerbaijan
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,
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khanates
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the khanates
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 remained separate.
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, tribalism and lack of unification
was
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were
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 predominant features of the
khanates
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.
Neighboring
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Neighbouring
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 with
Russian
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the Russian
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 and Qajar
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empire
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empires
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 was
the
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apply
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one of the disadvantages of
khanates
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