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some people say that big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. do you agree or disagree ?

#people #salary #job #satisfaction
It is undeniable that salary is the main factor and more influence important role play for surviving individuals' perspective in society nowadays.
Although
,
job
 satisfaction is essential for
work
 to
happiness
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 and enjoyment for effective. I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion as income is not factor ways for successful
people
 in their jobs.
To begin
 with, jobs or
work
 are increasing significantly following by trends, the majority of
people
 search for opportunities for
work
, which is the main purpose for getting higher income in their jobs while dose not even thinking and considering associated with attitude to
this
 profession, it leads to unhappiness and ineffective for the ability to
work
 together with another team. To illustrate,
people
 can not improve their identity effectively and are bored without interesting information as dissatisfaction.
For instance
, It
job
 is very important and essential relevant to real life which for harder to understand and able to greater salary per month.
However
, teenagers or the young generation
is
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are
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 very interactive for accessible
work
, which leads to competitiveness and more specific information to remember, so
people
 have many problems with stress and dissatisfaction in the end.
Furthermore
,
job
 satisfaction is various important than a big salary. It is obvious that experience of
work
 can learn many new things and make many exciting discoveries for open perspective for their individual opinion, while it can develop and improve effective about the ability to get happy in the future. In conclusion, good income should be considered for
job
 satisfaction together for effective and increased happiness for a healthy lifestyle.
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